My Mother is Nuerotic

My mother is crazy and only latley.
Well she has always been a little crazy but latley its worse.
She thinks my step dad is cheating on her which if you know him, you know its crazy.
Heck even she knows it is all in her head, but she can't quit.

Then we have 4 doors total in our house 2 actual doors
(a front one and one that leads to the porch)
then we have 2 porch doors
(one connected to the actual door of the house and one that goes out side).
Out of these 4 doors we have a total of 8 locks, no big deal right
wrong out of those 8 locks 4 are almost always locked.
The front door has 2 that always lock and the outside porch is always locked
even when we are home running in and out.
When we aren't home ALL the locks are locked.
I have keys to both actual doors but only 1 door set is useful to me.
So I have said in irritation how annoying it is and a little ridiculous
my mom finally got mad and now I lock the main doors at night because my mom is
crazy
and wont lock any doors.

O.k.
I am done ranting on my mothers craziness.
For now.

Nomination

I watch you from afar,
I follow you home making sure you get there.
I try not to, but I can't help myself
from climbing up your tree
spying threw your window to get a glimpse of
your soft black hair that shines in the light.
Then really I must stay through the night
to protect you I swear
from the monsters trying to get in and steal you away from me.
I know you think little of me my love in the day,
so I must take this opportunity of the night
to sneak into your window swiftly and quietly
watching for the floorboard, steps away,
that squeaks like a mouse stepped on,
every night I watch you, an angel of despair,
for I know that you could never love me,
so as I sit watching you sleep
caressing your soft, fragile cheek
I think of the moment when you will be
mine
in the soft darkness of forever.
I dream of the red blood contrasting with
your pale white skin, our lives mixing
now forever intertwined, as the knife of fate plunges deep.
But for now I watch you all the time from afar
until the nights and my dreams come alive.

Alleyway encounters

Haley walked toward the mouth of the alleyway, pulling her coat closer. She looked around licking her dry lips. She knew she shouldn't be here, a girl from the other side of the tracks alone. She couldn't help it though. Every year no matter what she had to come and every time she was disappointed. This year she was sure would be no different.
She sat on a porch step, her eyes filled with weary hope and a bit of sadness, the size of a sparrows eye. She watched the people pass her by, rushing to get last minuet shopping done - little toy soldiers marching by, eyes straight ahead not noticing the lonely lady on the steps. She watched the snow fall softly, gently numbing her. She welcomed the snow. It wasn't snowing that night so long ago, but she remembered wishing it would, as she stared into the sky bumping into the stranger. That was the start as he shyly helped her gather her shopping bags. He invited her to coffee and she excepted. That was the start, she began to return to the alley to meet with him every Monday, she learned all she could of him. He was a musician, played guitar. his name was Ethan. Haley fell in love with Ethan and they were happy, until l he moved far away a year after they met. They promised to here every year on the day they met. Ethan had came every year for awhile, until all contact stopped. Haley couldn't understand why. He never answered the phone when she called or returned her emails. She knew that she should give up hope, it's been five years, but she can't stand the loneliness gently pressing down on her, slowly strangling her. So now every year she waits just like she promised. BOOM! Haley jumps at the sound of a church bell ringing midnight, bringing her back to the present. She sighed shifting her weight on the cold unforgiving cement. When she scanned the crowd once more, her breath caught in her throat as she saw someone who looked like Ethan. She ran up to him feeling as if maybe it was him, maybe her memories had failed her or he had changed slightly over time.
"Ethan!" she shouted the man had spotted her, so she bent over trying to catch her breath and calm her heart. The man had finally come close enough for her to get a better look. Haley felt her eyes fill with tears, this was not Ethan, here was yet another year of the bitter disappointment.
"Do you know Ethan? Are you Haley?" The man asked, his eyes widening
"Yes...Who are you and what happened to Ethan to make him stop visiting?" She was wary now, what if something happened, Ethan was dead? And how did this stranger know her name?
"My name is Joey and Ethan is my brother. He- "
"He had a brother? I never knew. Is he o.k?"
"Ethan is fine now, let me finish" Haley was about to interrupt again when he said this but held her tongue.
"He has been in a comma, after getting in a car accident. He woke up about six months, he lost his memories. "
"Wait you said he lost all his memories, does he remember me?" She was afraid to hear the answer. What if he had forgotten her?
"He doesn't exactly. He found a picture of you in his guitar case when he woke up. He remembered that you were important and he was getting flashes of memories of you. Finally about a month ago he remembered a name." So Ethan was alive, and could only remember she was important. Oh well she could work with that. She knew that she would go with this man who was Ethan's brother and everything would work out.
"I know this is hard to take in would you like to see a picture of him?" Joey reached for his wallet, the picture was of him playing the guitar for the first time since he woke up.
"Sounded as nails on a chalkboard but after a few hours his body took over. I have to go now, a business meeting tomorrow, but if you get a chance here is his new address stop in if you can." Joey then turned and left a very shocked Haley. She sat there in silence, listening to faraway police sirens and the people still rushing, not as much, but still toy-soliders oblivious to the small miracles happening all around.
Yes, Haley thought to herself, I will go to the nearest airport and go to him. I will not wait another year. The lonliness had left and she was filled with happiness and a few bits of anxiety, little pinpricks stabbing into her. He didn't remember her after all. He would though, this she knew, she would bump into him on the sidewalk again one day and he would remember. As she walked home she left the dark alley that had always been her path, tonight she walked home following the street lamp lined road.


1.) is the ending o.k? I know its open but does it work as an ending?

What I Needed to Say V.1

At the time that you left the little girl didn't think twice.
Everything was the same as before
life went on
nothing changed.
After all you had slowly disappeared from her life
so why should she care when one weekend
poof you were gone. Life
was o.k, normal

She didn't need you
She had mom and the rest of her family.

No more crying in bed
missing her mom calling for her.
Instead it was midnight cries why?
An unknown reason
only sadness and confusion but
slowly she learned that
those cries made by a lonely girl was for her
daddy.

He had left her,

Alone.

No body could hear her as she wept
silently in the sleeping house.

Wondering
why?
Why? Why had he left her?
Did she do something wrong?
Should she have held back the tears that fell every night
that caused him to drive her home
because she was to weak?

Slowly the tears would stop as she grew
and she tried to tell herself that he was the bad guy
she was the victim.
But still she was not free.

Then it happened one day.
It was small
a message.
"Hi, this is you dad"
Years of no contact
she thought she was fine
but it was the shock.

Why, she thought,
why?
Why now?
Why do you want to talk now?
Should I send a reply?
Should I be angry?
Hopeful?
Forgiving?

Suddenly the shock wore off.
The tears that were held back since third grade came back.
She cried to her step dad that night telling him of the message

the hurt that she wanted to hide showing.
She wanted to be strong
but that simply message broke her facade.
She messaged back
a few messages were given back.

They too stopped.
She was not surprized.
Now she wants to say

"Go away
I don't care
You have to put in the effort
I wont cry for you again."

1.) SO this is a new kind of peom stlye for me. Do my line breaks work or are they weird?
2.) Can I do anything to make it better?

Pizza Night Disaster version 2

Pizza Night Disaster

(ELLIE and BOB at his house laughing and flirting on his couch when the doorbell rings)

ELLIE:
Oh! That must be the pizza, I'll go get it.

(grabs money from the counter and answers the door.)

DEREK:
Here's your pizza, Ellie?

ELLIE:
D-Derek? Is that you? I haven't seen you in like-

DEREK:
4 years 2 months and 25 days.

(ELLIE gives DEREK a blank stare)

ELLIE:
So, can I have my pizza now?

DEREK:
Oh yeah...I was wondering if you....well, we could maybe...go to coff-

(In walks BOB, ELLIE'S new boyfriend, who has known ELLIE for years and knows the history between DEREK and ELLIE. BOB realizes who DEREK is and makes it obvious that ELLIE is with him now.)

BOB:
What's taking so long babe?

ELLIE:
look who's delivering the pizza! It's Derek from high school.

(DEREK reluctantly waves.)

DEREK:
Hi Bob.

(said dully)

BOB:
Dude! Wow! Nice to finally meet you! I've heard so much about you from Ellie. Why don't you come in and hang for a while?

(ELLIE and DEREK start to look uncomfortable)

ELLIE:
Well, you know hun, he probably has more work to do. You know, pizza's to deliver.

BOB:
Nope, the pizza place closed, ours was the last delivery. So come on in Marek.

DEREK:
Actually, the name is Derek.

(he gets pushed inside the door as he says this. ELLIE follows reluctantly)

BOB:
So why don't we open up this pizza and dig in? Oh, do you mind if I start the movie back up?I know you know what it's about Cedric-

(DEREK mutters it's Derek)

(BOB unconcerned continues)

Ellie here told me you two watched it all the time. Let's eat!

(Opens box and digs in oblivious to the tension surrounding the other two.)

ELLIE:
I'm not hungry anymore, I think I'm catching something Carrie from-

DEREK:
(perks up a little)

You're sick? I can make you some chicken noodle soup. It's your favorite if I remember right...If you have the ingredients that is...

ELLIE:

Oh, I don't eat meat anymore. Bob is a vegetarian.

DEREK:

Really?

(looks puzzled)

BOB:

Yep, my ex Becky gave me this book that helps explain it all better. I'll go get it.

(gets up and leaves the room. Exits off stage. DEREK and ELLIE sit in an awkward silence for awhile with no one sure of what to say.)

DEREK:

So...yeah...

ELLIE:

Yea.

(brief pause as DEREK gets ready to say something. )

DEREK:

Listen Ellie. I know that you're with Bob now, but I still love you, and I want to-

ELLIE:

No.

DEREK:

No?

ELLIE:

No, I am not giving you another chance with me, Derek.

DEREK:

Why?

(looks sad and a little confused.)

ELLIE:

Why? WHY?!? You are the one who dumped ME! I was happy with us when randomly YOU, wanted to break up.

DEREK:

Let me-

ELLIE:

Let me explain? NO! You missed that chance when you walked out of my life. I've lived in the same area for years, you could have easily gotten in touch with me again! I cried for weeks after you left but, you know what? I got over you, and you know what else? I'm fine. I have a decent job, a home and a boyfriend.

(During all of this ELLIE is getting more and more worked up. Finally she is in tears and the last two sentences are said sadly as if she is trying to convince herself as well. In walks BOB with the book and sees his girlfriend sobbing.)

BOB:

(sighs)

Now what's the matter you crybaby? You're always crying. You should have the dignity to not cry in front of guests. You're making poor whats-his-face nervous.

(All of this is said condescendingly. Through out this whole thing DEREK is getting more upset and finally erupts.)

DEREK:

DEREK! My name is DEREK! D-E-R-E-K! The name is NOT THAT HARD to remember. How would you like me to forget YOUR name? HUH? And even if I didn't remember your name, I would TRY to remember it. You know why? Because I'm not a giant, unintelligent, vegetarian jerk-face!I mean seriously, who in their right mind lets their girlfriend's ex in the house, leaves them alone together and when he gets back to see her CRYING, makes fun of her?? I should have never let her sister talk me out of purposing to her...

(DEREK realizes he just blew-up on BOB, insulted him and accidentally told ELLIE why he broke up with her. He looks horrified.)

ELLIE:

What did Lisa tell you?

BOB:

Who cares, that's not important. Did you hear what he called me? Plus it sounds like he wants to get you back. Well that's not going to happen.

(BOB punches DEREK which turns into a full-blown fist fight. DEREK falls to the ground and BOB is about to deliver the last blow.)

Any last word Der-ek?

(BOB says this mockingly)

ELLIE:

STOP!

(she rushes to kneel next to the fallen DEREK.)

I can't stand being with you anymore Bob. I thought I was content with my life, but this made me realize that I don't love you. In fact I hate you. You're a jerk, and I'm sick of all your bull crap. I'm leaving.

(she helps DEREK up)

BOB:

Leaving?

ELLIE:

Yes, leaving. Not just the house, but you. Not sure what I'm going to do, but as long as I'm not with you, I'm fine.

(This makes BOB angry so he slaps ELLIE)

BOB:

Leaving? You think you can leave me, Ellie? I put you back together when he left you, you're nothing without me. I own you.

(DEREK is sick of BOB's crap so he knocks BOB out.)

DEREK:

You don't hit a girl, you piece of crap.

ELLIE:

This doesn't mean we are back together you know.

DEREK:

It doesn't? What happens to the hero getting the girl in the end?

ELLIE:

That only happens when the hero isn't hiding something from the love of his life.

DEREK:

What if the reason is only part of the hero's fault and his stupidity?

ELLIE:

Does any of the rest of the blame go to the girl's sister who may or may not be evil.

DEREK:

Yes.

ELLIE:

I'm listening.

DEREK:

(sighs)

Well you see. Apparently Lisa had this huge crush on me. So when she heard I was going to purpose to you, she set me up. She got me totally wasted one night, led me up to her apartment, and kissed me, and it was a kiss. Then she led me into her room. I spent-

ELLIE:

So, you cheated on me?

DEREK:

No, I did not cheat on you.

ELLIE:

But you just said-

DEREK:

Would you let me finish the story?

ELLIE:

Fine, but if I find out you cheated, so help me God...

DEREK:

I didn't cheat on you woman! After she got me inside, I realized what she was doing, so I stopped her. She accepted that and let me stay the night anyway. And apparently she knows a security guard. 'Cause when I woke up she said that she would have him tell you that he saw us kissing, entering her room and me never leaving. She wanted to black mail me into going out with her but I couldn't stand the thought of not only breaking up with you but having her throw her new relationship in your face. I didn't want you to think I cheated on you but I thought that you could get over me if you never saw me again. I didn't think you could have saw the truth in what happened. I didn't want you to break my heart, so I took the cowards way out. I'm sorry.

(there is a pause as the words sink in.)

ELLIE:

SO, you didn't try to fight for me?

DEREK:

No and I realize I should have especially seeing what "saved" you.

(nudges the still unconscious BOB with his foot.)

ELLIE:

I don't know if I can move past the fact that you didn't try to fight for me.

DEREK:

I fought for you now, didn't I?

ELLIE:

True, but I'm still not sure.

(says this a little playfully)

DEREK:

I'm also am willing to start all over again, and get the put into the doghouse.

ELLIE:

hmmmm.

(pretends to think hard.)

I'll think about it.

(DEREK kisses ELLIE sweetly)

DEREK:

Think about it enough?

ELLIE:

(mocks being tired and surrendering)

Fine. I suppose, BUT! You're not out of the dog house yet. I'm not completely sure that I believe your story. But I am willing to give it a try again, and next time, don't listen to my sister.

DEREK:
O.k I can live with that. As long as I can be with you.


o.k I changed a few things, I don't know if I like the ending though. Any thoughts on the ending would be helpful.


1: How is my dialogue?

2: How believable are my characters?

A time my life changed v.1

No longer lonely

My life was lonely

Not that I knew it at the time.

Floating from one person to the next

Giving them my friendship

Only to have them forget me in a summer.

I didn’t know I was lonely

After all you can’t miss what you never really had.

Then they came into my life

Not all at once

Slowly

One at a time

Giving me a taste of what was to come.

They slowly surrounded me with their light,

A safety net to catch me if I ever fell.

Suddenly I knew that I was lonely,

But that was before I met them.

Now I am included and loved.

Now I don’t wish I was someone else.

I no longer have the hole eating me

Devouring me

Whenever I left someone’s house.

Now I am safe and whole

And I make others fell the same

Lifting them up when they get heavy

Supporting them

And getting the same in return.

They are my pillars and I am one of theirs.

I’m not lonely anymore

Because I have friends

True friends

That I know with all my heart

That they would never forget me in a summer.

1.) Do I ramble at the end? Do you think I could end it sooner and still have it good?

2.) Should I try to add more imagery?